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January 30, 2007
A story by Jack
This is a story Jack wrote for school. I found it on the kitchen counter and remember reading the first draft several weeks ago.
From this point forward, Jack will be getting no mushrooms on any pizza he eats.
My Greatest Adventure
by Jack Wells
age 11
Chapter One: The First Day
"My name is Bart Beetles." I said on the first day of school. "I was born in 1994. My best friend is Ben McFarlain."
This school is Veselin Acks Merry Elementary (VAMES for short). At VAMES everything is fun for kids. The playground is amazing it has six swings, a 150 foot slide, a rock wall, and a videogame corner. The text books are 1,000 pages each. But we only read one fourth of them (250 pages). They're building a 1,500 foot slide. "Let's go to the playground," I said to Ben.
But when we got there the 150 foot slide was gone. They were building the 1,500 over it.
"Look out." I yell to Ben. But it was too late, the part to the slide had already crushed him. Before I could tell someone to get him, I was jabbed in the side with a spoon. I fainted. [The original line: I was poked in the side with a knife. I passed out.]
Chapter Two: When I Woke Up
When I woke up I was in an underground facility. My side is aching. I thought I was behind three boxes. One stacked on top of two. "Did you get the donut?" A voice said sounding a lot like Ben
"Yup I got them all." Said the other man.
"Are they jelly filled?"
"No, they are not."
I look behind the boxes. It is Ben. "Whose that?" The man yelled while running at me.
I ripped open one box. Nothing. I jump in and closed the side. "He's gone. Must be seeing things," the man said. He walked away. Something broke the bottom of the crate and I fell through.
Chapter Three: Further Underground
Stunned and shocked I decide to ignore the head injury I just got. When exploring I hide twice to be safe. But the second time was because I heard something coming from the other direction. It was a beautiful unicorn. Sadly I have cornophobia. The fear of anything with "corn" in its name. So I shrieked and ran away. Coming to a stable is where I stopped.
Chapter Four I Think ... Yup Chapter Four. Busted!
I had to be careful here. They had corn, corn on the cob, unicorns, unicorns with unibrows, corn syrup and corn juice. There was one donut in the center of it all. "I need that donut." I whispered. Luckily there was a door on the other side and corn repellent on the wall. I ran through the room spraying the repellent in every direction possible. I gabbed the donut, took a bite and put it in my pocked. I got caught in a net. Then I woke up in my room. "Those unicorns stole my donut." I screamed.
Chapter Five: Mom and Dad's Surprise
Half conscious I decide to take a nap. When I wake up I scratch my butt and go down the stairs to eat. I notice a note that says "Dear Bart, at a bingo game in Vegas. See you in three weeks. Love your mom and dad." I call every house in the world. "A in Vegas. I see." I go back to my room only to find a clown. ["A in Vegas." I can't help but feel something is missing.]
Chapter Six: Bum bum bum
It started running at me so I locked the door. It bursts through and falls down the stairs. It threw its sword at me and Jackie Chan came out of nowhere and deflected it with his fist.
Posted by delmer at January 30, 2007 8:20 PM
Comments
"Sadly I have cornophobia. The fear of anything with "corn" in its name."....hilarious!!! That boy will go far! Well done Jack - fantastic story.
Posted by: Pen at January 31, 2007 10:57 AM